Our Beautiful 'Planet' (A writing call)
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Itβs another normal dayβyou wake up and the sun is shining warm and bright in the sky above.
But itβsnotthe sun, and thatβsnot reallythe sky.
Itβs a screen thatsurrounds the planet.
Butitβsnot reallya planetanymore, is it?
Itβs more machine than anything.
No longerhuman.
When was the last time you saw the sky?
You canβt recall.You get ready for the day, and go out to head to work.
But waitβyou donβt have a job anymore.
It was taken from you.
A computer works your job for you.
βFor the sake of money,β your employers explained.
βEverythingβs a little tight right now, and everyoneβs suffering,β they say, filled with false sympathy for you.Sometimes you wonder if your employers are even human.
Sure, they look the part, but they lack the soul.
Theyβre richer than you, so they donβt understand the struggle of trying to make a living, or worrying about not having a job.
Do they even have feelings?
Or are they like the computers that took your job?You think to yourself that youβll read a book to pass the time and get your mind off things.
You pick up one of your favorite books that you know almost completely by heart, and begin to read.
As you progress further through the story, you frown.
No, these canβt possibly be the words.
Youβve read this book too many times not to remember this.
Something is wrong here.
The words are wrong, and the plot is slowly delving into madness, straying into something else entirely.
You forgotβyour last copy got taken, and used to train these computers.
They rewrote it.
This is not the same story you loved before.You go about your day, trying to stay sane.
The day grows hotter and hotter, the sunscreenglowing brighter, becoming almost blinding.
Itβs summer, you think.
But you canβt remember the last time you had true seasons in your lifetime.
When was the last time you felt snow fall and melt upon your skin?As the day winds down, the
screensky fades to night, and the starscamerasbegin to twinkle, like thereβs a little hope left.But you lay awake in bed, knowing that this has been your life for as long as you can remember, and no one will change anything.
In the end, you will be forced to find companionship in everything artificial, as the last humans die out, just as you will.
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I just submitted it, Iβll let you know if I hear anything back!
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also if you canβt tell, this was kind of inspired by erasure poetry and also those really unsettling spoken poems where its very dystopian and overwhelming, but uncomfortable because itβs true
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β§ππ’π°π‘π’πͺπ¬π«πβ§ Itβs deep seeking and majestic in a sense
God help them.
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it breaks down the way the world from the past intertwines with the new upcoming age of reality we have now, ai, etc,
God help them.
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Kenji OUGH thank you itβs not my usual writing style, and I kinda struggled with it (pushed it out in under an hour </3 fml)
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Kenji OK YES AND THATS KINDA WHAT I WAS GOING FOR- yES
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you are very welcome lol, you did wonderful for the timeframe you did it under. i use to write but i lost motivation
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Kenji itβs never too late to get back into it
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β§ππ’π°π‘π’πͺπ¬π«πβ§ youβre right but i have nooo motivation
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Kenji trust me gangalang- writerβs block when youβre trying to write a whole ass book is EXHAUSTING
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β§ππ’π°π‘π’πͺπ¬π«πβ§ a whole book is insane, ive tried before but got sidetrack of doom LOL
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Kenji yeahhh I originally started it last year as a school thing, ended up turning in 6 pages EXACTLY in google docs with i think .5 margins on each side </3
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β§ππ’π°π‘π’πͺπ¬π«πβ§ actually aura, i did the exact same thing but i ended up with 84 pages idk what margin i had
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Kenji HELLO??? 84??? DAMN-
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β§ππ’π°π‘π’πͺπ¬π«πβ§ LOL yeah, i fell in love with writing for awhile back in school. it let me express myself on a whole different level
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Kenji dude 84 pages is mad respect- idk if i could pull that off
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β§ππ’π°π‘π’πͺπ¬π«πβ§ if you pure your heart into it, you most def can
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Kenji defo just gotta find the motivation good lord i need that shakespeare shit to come back
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β§ππ’π°π‘π’πͺπ¬π«πβ§ i feel you on that one LOL
